Revision Introduction

This was a tough one. Pretty much everything I wrote for this class could use some revision. It became the task of picking the worst of the worst. This particular essay; “How to Tame a Wild Heart” really hit a nerve for me. Almost every other sentence in my essay started with “I.” This became more of a diatribe than an essay. While the focus of the paper was how the author brought out an emotional response, whether from agreeing or disagreeing, my essay sounded like a lecture to a child. My belief that my points were valid not withstanding, I offer a different spin on the subject.